simpsons

Title:The Simpsons go to New Zealand

On the airplane from springfield to New Zealand

"Aaww, where are we going" Homer loudly shouted.

"Homer stop your wining you should be grateful that we are going on a family vacation" Marge said.

"Yea dad we are going to..um let me check the ticket...New Zealand" Bart said.

"New what, where the hell is that" Homer gasped.

"New Zealand dad, it was the first country to give women the vore in 1893" Lisa proudly stated. Bart chuckled "women's rights" Homer also joined in with Barts chuckles much to Lisa's displeasure

"We'll have a great time, we can see the lord of the rings film site, meet the lord of the rings people, go to the lord of the rings musuem and......um lord of the rings" Marge said as she started to run out of breathe.

"Please fasten your seatbelts and remain in your seats, we will be arriving in Auckland very shortly" the dull voice said coming from the cockpit.

"What do you see boy' Homer shouted to Bart who was sitting by the window.

"Just cloud Homer" said Bart. The plane suddenly appeared from the cloud and made a safe landing onto the runway.It was an overcast but humid day in Auckland.The Simpson family quickly passed through customs, collected their luggage and exited the main doors of the airport.

"Homer look there's the rental car company" Marge shouted excitedly. The Simpsons walked over to the car rental counter.

"What can i do for you mate" the man behind the counter said to Homer (with New Zealand accent).

"Hello i want to rent a car" Homer replied strangely.

"Sorry mate. i've only got one car left,i don't know if it would be able to fit all of you, its a yellow mini" the man said nervously.

"I don't care what it is just give me the car" Homer angirly said to the man.The car rental employee gave Homer the keys and directed him to the car.Homer stuffed all the luggage into the tiny boot and got into the driver's seat.Marge squeezed into the spare front seat while Bart, Lisa and Maggie competed for space in the back of the car.

"Wow Homer, this is the crappiest car i have ever seen" Bart complained to Homer.

"Shut up boy, this car will get us to wherever the hell we are going" Homer said Homer nervously put the car keys into the iginition and turned, the tiny mini slowly came to life

"Hehe, piece of cake" Homer chuckled as he started driving. "Homer" Marge shouted as a car came head on towards the mini.Homer swerved to aviod the car.Lisa reminded Homer that he has to drive on the left hand side of the road.

"What kind of country is this, driving on the wrong side of the road" Homer shouted.Angered by the fact that he had to drive on the 'wrong side of the road' Homer started to drive fast and recklessly.Homer put his foot firmly on the acceleration pedal. The yellow mini achieved a top speed of 70 km/h. Homer then approached the roundabout on the outskirts of the airport. "Marge what the hell is this" Homer nervously said.Homer drove the mini into the roundabout and continued circling. After ten minutes of circling around and everyone feeling sick, Homer said"That's it" as he swerved the car into the Auckland motorway lane nearly causing a crash.

The Simpsons arrived at their hotel in downtown Auckland.After unpacking their luggage Marge said "Who wants to go up the big tower, i bet we would be able to see the whole of Auckland from up there".

"I do" Lisa beamed.

"aww, I don't want to go up that stupid tower, look how tall it is" Homer wined.

"Homer your coming, this is a family holiday" Marge sternly said.The Simpsons made their way to the base of the big tower and walked into the lift.

"Homer are you sure you want to come in here, you are so fat that the lift won't go up" Bart chuckled.

"Why you little" Homer shouted as he strangled Bart's neck.Homer stopped strangling Bart when he heard the lift doors open. The Simpsons walked out and could see a 360 degree view of Auckland.

"Isn't this amazing, we can see the whole harbour and all the islands" Lisa said. "Look you can even see our hotel from here" Marge said.

"You can even see that crappy yellow car, hey look Homer your getting towed" Bart giggled. "Doh" shouted Homer so loudly that everyone in the room looked at him. Lisa,Marge and Homer then walked over to the edge of the room where the floor was glass.Lisa stared straight down to the distant ground below her.

"Come on mom, its completely safe, the glass is very thick, it won't crack" Lisa beamed. "I'd rather not" Marge said nervously. Homer,Marge and Lisa were looking at the view when Bart went falling down outside the glass, pulling a face as her bungeed down.

Homer,Marge and Lisa looked at each other, not believing what they had just seen.

(i tried to put spacing in but once i saved the story it then went back to 1 big paragraph.

Stian's Fanfic

The Council of Elrond, with one more guest

This fan fiction takes place at the Council of Elrond in the Fellowship of the Ring. After reading the book, I thought there was one more thing that should be discussed at this council. Gandalf is a friend of Radagast, who is actually mentioned in the Council in the book, and I think that Radagast not only should be mentioned, but be present at this Council. He was the one who made it possible for Gandalf to escape from Orthanc, so he would be in everyone’s mind at the Council. Therefore I believe someone also should have invited him there.
Radagast has a network of Eagles that potentially could help the Fellowship on their way to Mordor. Whether or not they choose to use this network isn't really the issue, but I think it is really obvious that they should have at least discussed it, since there is no reason mentioned in the book that says the Eagles can’t help them on their way.

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Frodo could hear the loud flowing river Bruin as he walked through Rivendell, and watched the pale, cool sunrise above the far mountains shine down through the glimmering leafs. Suddenly, a single clear bell rang out. It was the warning bell of the Council of Elrond. Gandalf led him to the port where the council was held.

Frodo entered the Council, and saw people sitting in a circle with a stone pillar in the centre. He could hear the noise of bubbling water coming up from the foaming waterfalls below, and the birds singing over the peaceful land. The faces that met him were grave, and the people were silent. He saw Glorfindel, Gloin, and Boromir from Gondor, and sitting in the corner was Strider who had put on his old travellers clothes again. He sat down at a seat pointed out by Elrond. Elrond proceeded with introducing Frodo to the Council, and then the people who Frodo had not seen before were introduced to him.

There was a younger dwarf seated next to Gloin, his son Gimli, and besides Glorfindel, there were several other members of Elrond’s household. Then Elrond introduced Radagast, who earlier had sent the eagle Gwaihir, the Windlord, to rescue Gandalf from the corrupted wizard Saruman at Orthanc.

“He is Radagast the Brown, or Aiwendil as we call him”, said Elrond. Frodo looked at the old man sitting next to Gandalf. He had white hair reaching down to his back, a long white, greyish beard and bushy eyebrows. Like his name, his cloak was brown, and he had a brown bag with herbs laying on his right lap, and his long, wooden staff in his left hand.

“Radagast is an Istari wizard, and comes from Valinor like Gandalf and the rest of the wizards of this world”, Elrond continued. “He is the Tenderer of Beasts, and a bird-friend. After I heard he came to Gandalf’s aid at Orthanc with his mighty eagle Gwaihir, I invited him to this council, in the hope that we can make use of his great wisdom in this dark age as well.”

Then Elrond, Gandalf and Bilbo told the story of the making of the Rings of Power, how Sauron betrayed them and made the One Ring to rule them all; how Sauron lost this ring; how it got to Gollum - and then found its way to Bilbo and Frodo.

After this, the Council discussed what they should do with the ring. Boromir told of how he looked at the ring as a gift, which should be brought to Gondor and be used in the fight against the evil. Some mentioned it should be given to Tom Bombadil, others suggested it should be thrown into the Ocean, and be forgotten. No one wanted to take the quest of bringing the Ring into Mordor. The very air one breathes is poisonous, and the land is infested with countless orcs and other wicked creatures. But throwing the Ring in the ocean, or bringing it to Gondor would not solve their problem; Sauron’s spirit would still be alive if the Ring was not destroyed.

They discussed back and forth, and the frustration grew proportionally with the sound of their voices as they could not decide who was going to take the Ring to Mordor. In the midst of the heated discussion, suddenly a small, thin voice spoke up. “I will take it!” There was a sudden silence spreading through them. “I will take the Ring to Mordor” Frodo suggested. Everyone was surprised, even Frodo himself. It was then decided that Frodo would carry the burden of being the Ring-bearer.

"Then," said Aragorn, "let us send message to the eagles.” Aragorn looked at Radagast, expecting that he was already thinking of it. “We can pass by foot and boat to the Brown Lands and gather there with the eagles, and then they can fly with the Ring-bearer to Orodruin.” Frodo’s face got softer. He liked the idea of being carried to Mt. Doom by flight, instead of taking the long, dreaded way through that evil land by foot.
"It is not my decision to make”, Radagast sighed, and folded his hands on his lap. “The eagles are not simply my servants who do whatever I ask of them. They are independent creatures, and can only do what is permitted by the Valar. I have no say in this matter.” Aragorn frowned and recalled “But Gwaihir helped Gandalf escape from Orthanc?”
“That is true,” Gandalf replied. “Ever since I saved Gwaihir from a poison arrow, he has been both eager and ready to help whenever I’m in danger. Unfortunately does this not mean that he will be willing to fly the Ring-bearer into Mordor.”

Elrond stood up and walked towards the stone pillar in the middle, and concluded “Radagast and Gandalf, as you said, you cannot decide this here. I say you leave at sunrise and set course for the Misty Mountains. Tell the eagles then of this meeting and ask them to give us their aid.” Radagast looked at Gandalf and nodded "It is worth the attempt." Gandalf and Radagast sat course towards the Misty Mountains the next morning.

Kary' fanfiction (Final)

Title:In love with you

Hello, every one. Welcome to my blog, This is my fan fiction. my English is not really good, but hope you can understand it.


Both of them are satting on a very fancy car. Xu Hai stared at BaoZhu.

“Why you keep looking at me?” said Bao zhu

“You are looking at me as well,” Xuehai looked at Baozhu nasty, and holed her firmly in his arms.

“Bao Zhu, can I ask you a question?” watched at Baozhu, Xuehai softly asked. “..I…um...Can I call you wife?”

“……”Baozhu suddenly forgot to breath. And flushed cheeks, her answer has been revealed. “Wife … wife….wife...”Xuehai look at Baozhu, said that word softly.

“Wife, do you know? When I every time say that word, I think I am the most happiest man in this world. This is the first time I have happy since the days we were in Hangzhou(the place name of China). Baozhu, at this moment are you happy ? And now are you feel happy?” Xuehai said slowly , Baozhu already had reddish eyes, he gently stroked her cheek and wipe the tears in Baozhu’s eyes.

“Da Lang(other name for Xuehai)…” a long time after, “As long as you, I’ll be happy,” Baozhu choked said.

“My wife…” Xuehai headed down and kissed him. "Baozhu will be my first and last lover in my life" Xuehai thought.

“Master, we are back home now.” At this time, the driver had break the romantic moment, Xuehai looked up and kept stared at the driver. Baozhu looked at Xuehai and laughed.

“Come on, get off.” Baozhu said with smiled.

“Baozhu, a few days ago, I asked my workers to move over your luggages to our new house. Do not worry…none of them will be missinf!” “oh, thank you.” Baozhu said with smiled.

“haha.... to be a best man in the world, I have to know how to protect my woman, and also need to know how to get everything ready for her.” Xuehai said smiled.

Baozhu Looked at Xuehai, she felt he is a bit silly but also he is the only one who is love her the most. she found out Xuehai had changed a lot compared with before.

“Ugly mushroom head (any other name for Xuehai as well)!” said Baozhu
“Yes!” Xuehai stood up

“Now, help me pick up my panther toy from the front.”

“Yes!” that was a sweet command.

When they back to home, Xuehai and Baozhu changed back to their usual clothing, Sun was setting, after dinner, Xuehai and Baozhu returned to their room.

“Wife…” said Xuehai.

“What,,,,?” said Baozhu.

“wife…” said Xuehai.

“What….？” said Xuehai.

“How many times you want to call me?” Baozhu turned her head in front of Xuehai. But each time she looked at him, she felt full of happiness.

“Wife…” said Xuehai with smiled. “I will call many times in my life, until the world is end. So I can not answer your question,haha.” Said Xuehai.

"Oh, you bad,” said Baozhu

“Wife, this is not fair, I call you wife, you have to call me husband as well.”said Xuehai. “I need to hear you call me husband !” Xuehai’s heart always been shouting this words out.

“Ugly mushroom head, do not push too much!”said Baozhu. Xuehai suddenly stiff. “Wife, how come you still so fierce.” Xuehai complained to Baozhu.

“Well, I just said it once, listen carefully.” Baozhu said with shy voice and bit tense.

“Husband~!” Xuehai felt very surprised and looked gentel at Baozhu.

Xuehai woke up by the sunlight, watched the sleeping Bahozhu and kissed her lips softly. Baozhu slowly open her eyes until she saw Xuehai.

“Da lang…” Baozhu looking at Xuehai’s face, “I’m afraid of the dream I had last night. I’m afraid that…you’re like four years before, When I woke up, I can not found you, and you are disappeared.” Baozhu tightly held Xuehai.


"She was afraid ... Yes, she was afraid all this happen is a dream; she was afraid God would took away her happiness; she was afraid ... she is unfit to be happy.


“Fool,” Xuehai held Baozhu. “Baozhu, can you hear it? That was my heart beating, you will not lose a beat heart, because we need each other to survived.

“I,” said Baozhu.

“Wife, do not say any things,” said Xuehai.

“Dalang…no, Xuehai, you become more mature.” He seems to make her more dependent on him.


“I become to love you more, more and more.” Xuehai said sweet sound. “Baozhu, before I do not know anything, don’t know how to give you happiness, now I will always be love you in addition. And I will also give you a lot of happyness,” said Xuehai.

“Ok, we have to wake up,” Baozhu against Xuehai smiled. “ I don't want to leave a bad impression to your sister.”


Baozhu looked Xuehai and Xuehai’s family members, from now on, they are her family. She could felt what is love and what is family from them. Xuehai…let her have a new happy and lovely new life.

Chloe's Fanfic: Shapeshifter WIP DRAFT

Title: Shapeshifter

Series: Young Justice (animated)

Robin. Regret. It aches.

M’gann looks up from her attempt at apple pie and glances to her left. Wally is sitting hunched over at the opposite end of the metal counter, staring blankly at his half chewed hot dog. This was seriously unusual for the speedster.

Robin.

She hears the soft whisper again; not out loud, but in her head. She frowns at the red head.

“Wally…?” she asks tentatively, floating closer.

He seems to register her voice and slowly looks up at M’gann’s concerned face. Wally quickly breaks into a lop-sided grin, like he was caught doing something dirty.

“Hey Megan, baby. How you doin’?”

He winks at her.

“Wally… Wha—Do you feel okay?”

The speedster’s grin falters for half a second but then it grows wider.

Pain.

“I’m peachy fine. Seriously.”

“But you haven’t even finished your meal,” M’gann gestures to the plate.

Wally squints down at his frankfurter, grabs it with flash speed and shoves it all into his mouth.

“I’b jash tihar,” Wally tries to speak with his cheeks puffed out like a chipmunk.

“…..You’re just tired? Um. Okay,” M'gann started to say, "But-"

"Megan, really. Im fine. Please." Wally's eyes stare at her with a sense of desperation, but he still had a smile on his face. It looked quite fake.

“O-okay.”

Awkward silence.

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William review

Simpson fanfic
Name: Sideshow Bob the drunks snitch id:6762642

Firstly the reason why i watch simpson cartoons is because they are funny,they highlight the stupidity of america and conservitive culture in a cartoon.The simpsons portray these ideas through the simpson family everyday life.I think this fanfic was ok,its descriptions were a bit brief but the characters were portrayed well(sideshow bob,cecil,chief wigim),i could imagine these characters saying the script in a real simpson cartoon.The fanfic also jumps to a scene which says '2 days later',this is rare for simpson cartoons but still vialble.The author should have elaborated more about what happened to the springfield residents after alchahol was banned(because to many people got drunk on st.patricks day) .Overall i thought 6/10 and with more description and character detail it would become a much better fanfic.




2nd review
author:Lisabeth Simpson
name:waylon symthers and montgomery burns id:5915691

I thought this fanfic was pretty good.The story is about Weylan Smythers and how he met Mr.Burns.Weylans character in the simpsons in a smart under confident man who gets abused by Mr.Burns but seems to worship him like a god.I think that the the plot of Smythers getting beaten by his step farther and drunk mother is plauseable but i doubt they would ever make a real cartoon on this as it is a little sensitive.The characters had good descriptions but i felt the grammer was incorrect in some places.The author is french so english is not her first language.The end to the fanfic is good because Mr.Burns says "my name is Montgomery Burns",this is apprioate as in the real simpsons Weylan meets Mr.Burns like this.



3rd review
Author:Tomboy Skater
name:Muntz story id:5518050

I feel this fanfic is poorly wtitten and lacks any depth or action.The author introduces too many new characters which makes the story hard to understand and believe.There is too much dialogue and not enough description setting the scene.The fanfic plot is strongly based(mabey copied)from a past simpsons episode where Lisa falls in love with Nelson Muntz.I therefore feel that this fanfic is not original.



4th review
author:Nushiepie
name:barts subsitute id:6463294

This fanfic is good for the amount that has been written.Although it is it short it has an interesting and plauseable plot which is written well.The fanfic is about Bart and Milhouse talking about what they will do when the subsitute teacher comes.In the real simpsons Bart is always trying to trick teachers and make their life more miserable.I could imagine all the charcters in the fanfic saying the script in the real simpsons e.g Milhouse saying he can't cause trouble with Bart because he has to help his dad lay out the avacardo dip for his dads 'divorce group'.The ending is very good because it turns out Homer is going to be the class's subsitute teacher(the author may have got his idea from 1 simpson episode where the teachers are on strike and Marge is Barts teacher).If the fanfic was a little bit longer i feel it would be better but overall it was very good.



5th review
author:Marcen12
name:freaky friday id:6308308

This fanfic is based on the fights that Homer and Bart oftrn have.It is about Bart writing 'Ben Afflick' on Homers forehead when he is asleep,when Homer awakes he see's his forehead in the mirror and goes into a rage.He runs into Barts room to go and strangle him but slips on a soap bar and falls out of the window.I think that this type of script funny when your watching a cartoon.Although i can image the scene but it it is not as funny as watching the cartoon where Homer and Bart fight.I think that the fanfic is a little bit boring because anyone could write about Homer chasing Bart around their house.I don't really understand what motivated him to write this fanfic.



6th review
author:queentakhsis
name:The dying song id:6482587

This is one of the best fanfic about the simpsons i have read so far.It is unique because it is written in the first person.The author is mr.Burns and it is dialoge with Weylan Smithers.The fanfic is about mr.Burns and Weylan Smithers being stuck in a cave on a mountain due to an avalanche(author may have got the idea from a real simpsons episode where Homer and mr.Burns were stuck in a hut on a mountain after an avalanche).The descriptions of the scenery and 2 characters are excellent and i really could imagine this happening in a real simpsons cartoon.The author also wrote a poem and put 4 lines of the poem inbetween each paragraph.I thought the poem was a bit weird as it makes the fanfic a bit too serious but the poem rhymed and overall it fitted into the fanfic well.The story is very 'good' because in the real simpsons you get the feeling that mr.Burns and Weylon Smithers love each other.At the end of the fanfic they both kiss after being rescued from the mountain and i feel this is an good ending.The author obviously spent a lot of time writing this at it shows in the quality of writing.



7th review
author:drebom
name:the bartman flies id:6688073

This fanfic is about Bart and Milhouse turning into superheroes.The story is quite boring and unimagitive.It is about Apu(convienence shop owner) going missing and Bart and Milhouse try to solve the case.The dialoge that Bart and Milhouse say is true to character but the descriptions of scenes and events are very brief and poor.The story is also short but it is to be continued.The story ends when Bart seems someone in his room at night,the author then writes 'to be continued'.There have been many simpson episodes where Bart turns into a superhero so i feel the authors story is not completly original.




8th review
author:frankierox1996
name:bob's revenge id:6545870


This fanfic was very poorly written.There was hardly and punctuation used which may the fanfic hard to read and understand.The fanfic was about Sideshow Bob talking with his wife Violeta about stealing Fat Tonys violin.He wants to steal it because Fat Tony stole his 100 year old watch from him when they were kids.This fanfic lacks imagination,grammer and anything interesting.I do not know why he wrote this as nothing actually happens in this fanfic.The fanfic is also very short which mabey is a good thing as a longer version would be even more boring.




9th review
author:undeadsamarai01
name:simpsons antartic adventure id:5991766

This fanfic was written well and was quite funny.Although the name of the fanfic is simpsons antartic adventure is having nothing to do with antartic until the very end of the story.The story is about the nuclear power plant where Homer works.It is up to Homer to save everyone but he has no idea what to do so he calls the Lisa.The character dialoge is this fanfic was very good and true to the character of Homer and Lisa.The descriptions in the fanfic are very detailed and i can imagine the story happening.The fanfic is funny because the author describes how useless Homer is at his job(the manual for the nucluear reactor was hollowed out so Homer could put doughnuts it there.In the end Lisa tells Homer what to do over the phone and the problem is solved.I feel that the ending is not very good.Homer goes to mr.Burns office and mr.Burns tells him he is going to work in Antartica.This does not tie in with the story.Apart from the ending this was a well written and funny fanfic




10th review
author:boxofscraps
name:spider pig to the rescue id:6338142

This fanfic includes iron man and a pig from the simpsons movie.The fanfic is quite weird.It is about the spider pig walking on the ceiling when iron man blasts through the ceiling and takes spider pig.The dialoge of Homer is written well e.g"There goes my baby...seems like just yesterday I snatched him from the arms of a tired old clown...eh, whatever. I need a beer."
Overall i thought the story was a bit random but written well.

Kary's Reviews

I love reading at Asian TV shows‘s fanfiction。 So I will reviewing on Asians TV shows as my fanfiction topic.

Review1:The Final Discovery

Genre: Romance

This fanfiction is talking about the love triangle of Xiao Yan Zhi(the person who Yong Qi loves), Yong Qi(Prince) and Zhi Hua(Princese) in a royal family, the story is begining of Tai Hou (Dowager) doesn't want Xiao Yan Zhi to becoming an Empress, thus, Tai Hou let Zhi Hua marry to Yong Qi.......

I think this fanflction story in the three paragraph is quite nice, because I like the complicated relationship with the characters, the relationship are more complicated are more could catch the reader to continue to read. I think this story could describe more details information of the relationship with Xiao Yan Zhi's life。However I think this story is quite nice and fun.

Review2:Falling Over Me Chapter1

Genre: Romance

This fanfiction is talking around GuiGui, Qiu Sheng Yi and XiaoJie. The story start with GuiGui, she is 17 years old, but she alway thinking about marriage. Xiao Jie, she is Gui Gui's best friend, any problems GuiGui has, she will shear with XiaoJie. Qiu Sheng Yi witch is a guy who is very rich and famouse in the school.

This love story is start with GuiGui have to marry with Qiu Sheng Yi even GuiGui doesn't know about any things from Qiu Sheng Yi, and so on.........
I love this fanfiction story, because I had already watched the original tv show, however I am not really like the relationship in the original story with GuiGui and Qiu Sheng YI, because there are not much close contact with those two characters, but in this fanfiction, I could read they had more close contact in this story, I love the way how the witter putting two strangers into a sweet couple. It let me felt more excited and continue to read this fanfiction.

Review3:Shades Of Gray

Genre:Crime/Suspense

This story is takes the places from Taiwan. It is talking about a guy who went back to he's home town "TaiWan" from over sea. The reason he came back, because he got a post, which is being a police in South District.

I quiet like this kind of adventure's fanfiction, but I think this fanfction story a quiet short, and the witter is not showing enough deep of the content outline, because in this story just describe the character's feeling and who is meting character for the first day. I hope this writer could have more contents for this story, I think I will Like it.

Review4:A New Future

Genre:Romance
This story is talking about a girl who call Yang Duo is interviewing a job with a boss who call Ke Zhong in Laerence Interior Design.

I think this story is not very interesting. Because the content is quite similar of the original drama which I watched. I could easily guess or know the following content without keep reading the story. So I think the witter could write more her own idea for the following story. And the story is quite short. It doesn't write much about Yang Guo and Amber. I think the story will be more interesting if there are more content about other 3 roles.

Review5:Love In The Ice

Gerne:Romantic

This fanfiction is talking about a girl who call Xiao Mai and her friend Angel was returning from LA to Taiwan. And this two ladies are going to live together with 3 other boys in one house.
I think the story writer could try more harder on the ending of the story, because this story is kind of no ending, thus I could not know what is the finally result are, I think if the writer write more on the ending, I think will be perfect.

Review6:The Prince And Me Chapter1
Gerne:Romance

This fanfiction is same story background with my first reviews. Compare with this two story I think this fanfiction are quiet good, because it has show some Chinese background for all the reader. thus, other people who's are not Chinese background could understand the content of story more easily. And I like the writer use ancient time's story change to a twentich century' story, I think is quiet interesting. However I think this story could be more longer and if putting more information of the story content I think could be more fun and interesting.

Review7:Lipgloss

Gerne:Humor/Romance

This is one of my favourite tv show, in fat this drama is transfer from a Japanese‘ manga. This fanfiction is quiet fun, when I read through the sentence " Saitou-San ...next time kiss my dad, don't use lipgloss." sometime I do like having a little joke at the critical moment. Also I could see the sadness in this story, "Now how would she tell MInako about it without having her haver a heart attack." This sentence is end of the story, I like the way, the writer putting the unkonow ending in this story, because could let all other reader thinking of their own ending or guess what is going on further.

Review8:I Will

Gerne:Romance

This is a very romanstic story. The two important roles in this story have a very happy ending. They find their true love and marry together at the end. I like this story because it is a very sweet story. I would lile to contuniue to read it. If there are more sweet happen between them in this fanfiction story.. I think it wil be more interesting.

Review9:Uh Oh, Ithink I Like You

Gerne:Romance

This fanfiction is takes the places in South Korea. This story is talking around 3 people's love story. It is talking about a girl call Kali, she is a private nurse of a Gong Chan's grandfather. Gong Chan, he is a gentle and handsome guy. Yu Rin, she is Gong Chan's fiance, she is a energetic and friendly person who is always with smiled on her face.

I quiet like this fanfiction, first, for me I think is easy to read. And this story is talking about the love triangle , which is my favourite fanfiction content. But I think the writer in this fanfiction should write more content about what makes the happen start, what issue they going to have, and who going to leave this love triangle. Since in this story I just find out that, Gong Chan is much more care about Kali then Yu Ri. "Kali got the sudden feeling that Gong Chan didn't want Jun-woo to near her." I think if the writer more content for this story, I think will be more interesting and fun.

Review10:Two Months Of Summer

Gerne:Romance

This fanfiction is takes the place in TaiWan. The story's main charater is Rui Xi, she is a pertty, cute, with a short hair girl, she is 19 years old. Julia, which she is Rui Xi's best friend, she is come from America.

Be for Rui Xi is have a very long and pretty long hair, why do Rui Xi cut her hair? The reason she want to apply to a boy's hight school, because she's dream favourite boy is in that school. She want to meet him close. Therefor she cuts her hair short, cover her gender and apply to the school.

I think this story's content is almost talking about Rui Xi and Julia, it doesn't talk about the two relationship with Rui Xi and the boy she like. I don't really like the ending of the fanfiction story, because it is quite short. I think if the writer write more content in the body part and ending, this story will be more interesting and fun. By the way, this story overall is quite nice, I have enjoy to read it.

Stian’s Reviews

These are my fan fiction reviews of "The Lord of the Rings",

for iWrite 2011.

Review 1

“An alternative ending to The Lord of the Rings”

Genre: Humor / Parody

This fan fiction takes place inside Mt. Doom when Frodo is about to throw the Ring into the fire, but hesitates and Gollum bites his finger off and steals the Ring. Frodo tells Sam to get the Ring back, but Sam refuses to do so because he is tired of Frodo telling him what to do, and angry because he carried Frodo all the way up the mountain just to see Frodo not throwing the Ring when he had the chance. It ends with Sam and Frodo both falling over the edge and die..

I think this story was actually a bit funny, especially when Sam takes his stand against Frodo and says “I said NO!” It was an original idea which is actually plausible considering the circumstances they were in, and I could definitely picture Sam reacting this way after all he had been through.

The story should have been longer, and would probably also been better if the writer had spent a little more time on finishing the ending. But it was a creative and clever idea, and a funny alternative ending for the story.

Review 2
"What If?"
Genre: Angst

This fan fiction also takes place within Mt. Doom, when Frodo is about to throw away the Ring. When Gollum tries to steal the Ring from Frodo, Frodo manages to grab Gollum by the leg and hurl him into the flames. Frodo then makes the decision to keep the Ring and is overwhelmed by the Rings evil power, and throws Sam into a boulder which makes him faint.
Sauron, the Dark Lord of evil, then makes his appearance and takes the Ring away from Frodo, which means Frodo's mission is failed. Frodo then wakes up in a cave, chained to a wall, with remorse for what he had done (both for not throwing the Ring, and for hurting Sam), and with a need for revenge. The story then ends with a cliffhanger, which hints that Frodo is planning to take Sauron down.

I think this story is well written, and could make the story of the Lord of the Rings even further. I also think the writer has captured the personality of both Frodo and Sam, and has made the appearance of Sauron very believable. This alternative ending would only be the beginning to a whole new chapter, and I would like to see how this version progresses.

Review 3

“Unforseen”

Genre: Angst / Tragedy

This story takes place after the event at Mt. Doom, in”Elinduil”, which is a place neither mentioned in the books or films of the Lord of the Rings. The writer describes Elinduil as a place near the south of the Mirkwood border, where a group of Aragorn’s elvish friends lives.
In this fan fiction, the writer tells that in Mt. Doom, when Frodo and Gollum fights, Gollum wins and steals the Ring. Now, what’s left of the Fellowship, must find a way to find Gollum, and take the Ring back.

Although I think this is actually a plausible story, that Gollum manages to steal the Ring from Frodo at Mt. Doom, I feel it kind of rewinds the whole story back to the beginning. We would now have to go through chapters of finding the Ring, just so we could read more chapters of much of the same story we’ve read until now. The writer mentions that they can’t go back to Mt. Doom, because their army will not be able to draw the attention away from Mt. Doom long enough again. While this is actually true, what then will they do? If they try to hide the Ring from Sauron, the problem is not solved. When Frodo throws the Ring into the fires in the book (or the film), Sauron disappears completely. This will not happen if the Ring is only left under a stone, or thrown into the ocean. So if this had actually happened in the book, I guess the story would not have a good ending..

Review 4
"The Lord Of The Rings The Alternate Ending"
Genre: Drama / Angst

This fan fictions alternate ending is that “the Fellowship” is defeated after the great battle for Middle Earth, and they have to hide surviving people and animals to six different caves around Middle Earth. These caves are not in the books or in the films. The “Fellowship” must now find a way to get freedom to Middle Earth again.

I find this story to be very unlikely, all though it’s a fan fiction and “everything can happen”. The writer states that Frodo in this fan fiction manages to “rid the ring of 90% of its power”, which he is not able to do. Frodo is just a simple hobbit, and doesn't have powers like that. And also I think the writer should be more precise when he says that “the Fellowship was defeated”. Not only is the Fellowship broken a long time ago, but defeat would mean that Sauron has got the Ring back. Frodo and Sam weren’t a part of the great battle, so therefore it would mean that Saurons allies somehow must have intercepted them on their way to Mt. Doom, and that would probably mean that they would have been dead now.
This story needs to be worked more on to make sense.

Review 5
“My ending to lord of the rings”
Genre: Romance / Humor

This story is about after Sam and Frodo has thrown the Ring into Mt. Doom, Sam tells Frodo that he is going to ask Rosie to marry him. Frodo then tells Sam that he is in love with him and he shouldn’t marry her. Sam gets really happy and says that he also loves Frodo.. One year later they live together, and one day Sam gets pregnant, and the writer ends the story with “Hobbits really are strange creatures.”

This was an unexpected twist to the story I have to say. Not only the part where it turns out they’re gay, but also the part when Sam says he’s pregnant. When it said “One year later” I expected them to be married or something, but the pregnant part really came out of nowhere, which was funny. And it was especially funny when it ended the way it did. A nice fan fiction!

Review 6

"Mordor Voice"

Genre: Angst / Drama

This fan fiction was about Frodo and Sam’s struggle up Mt. Doom. Frodo had fallen into a deep sleep, and Sam couldn’t wake him up. When he finally wakes up, they start the painful walk up the mountain.

This was a very well written story. The writer was very good at describing the setting they were in, and the emotions Frodo and Sam went through. It was almost as if I could feel the heat from the mountain, and feel my body weaken. The way he portrayed what Frodo and Sam looked like was also very precise, and I really felt the actuality of the relationship between them. The writer makes us understand that Frodo and Sam has been through a lot, and they have friendship unlike any others. It really fitted its genre.

Review 7
"The Beginning of the End"
Genre: Angst

This fan fiction is about the story of how Sauron slowly recovered after the defeat of Isildur. Everyone thought he was dead, but he was not. His remains was carefully protected by his evil servants, until his "fea" found its way back to his body. After this, Sauron's evil spreads and corrupts those around him, and he begins to plan how to get the Ring back, and how to get his revenge.

I think this was a good and interesting story. The writer depicts the "evil side" of Middle Earth very well, and how Sauron gradually regains much of his power and need for revenge. The writer keeps it realistic according to the real story, and it could definitely be in a chapter of its own in a story about Sauron and his evil servants.

Review 8
"The Breaking of the Fellowship"
Genre: Horror / Humor

This fan fiction takes place when the Fellowship first encounters the Uruk-Hai and orcs after their journey down the Great River Anduin. When this encounter occurs, each of them is brutally murdered by the orcs.

I didn't quite expect this story. Every member of the Fellowship gets killed! But if one would think of the real Tolkien story objectively, it would actually be pretty far fetched to think that so few of the Fellowship would die through this encounter. It would probably be more realistic to believe that the Fellowship of eight people; two men, one elf, one dwarf, and four hobbits; against that many orcs, would probably be killed! Their odds were very low. So in the writers defence, he is in my opinion probably more realistic than Tolkien in this matter.

The story is way too short. Every character of the Lord of the Rings, who we have gotten to know so well through the first book, is suddenly brutally murdered. It would be really bad if the writer would end it so quick, without genuinly describing their last minutes..

Review 9
"My Return of the King Ending"
Genre: Humor / Drama

This fan fiction takes place when Frodo is about to leave to the Grey Havens, and is about to say his goodbyes to his friends. When Gandalf lets Frodo speak with Sam for the last time, Sam runs over to his pony, grabs a sack, and kidnappes Frodo. He runs away on his pony with Frodo, and they are never seen again.

This is a funny twist, although I think it's unlikely that Sam would do this to Frodo. Although they have become extremely good friends after all they have been through, Sam would never kidnap Frodo and never return when he has a wife and child at home. But it's a funny story, and a nicely written fan fiction.

Review 10

"The Return of a King"
Genre: Angst / Romance

This fan fiction is about the crowning of a new king of Gondor. Aragorn is supposed to become a king, but because he thinks of himself more of a ranger, he decides that Faramir is the new king of Gondor instead.

For people who haven't read the book, I guess this is a nice "twist" to the story. It shows us how important Aragorn's life as a ranger is to him, and reflects the characteristics of him that we got to know in the books (and the films).

But for one that has read the books, it is very unlikely that Aragorn would do this. Although he loves his life as a ranger, he would never do this to Gondor. Aragorn plays such a great role for Gondor after he became king; a role Faramir would never fit.

Chloe's Reviews

I enjoy DC comics as well as the animated versions. I will be reviewing fanfiction particularly of the new animated series: Young Justice :D

Review #1
Brave New World
Genre: Crossover, Angst, Fluff, Gen
Series: Batman & Robin (comics)/Young Justice Animated

This fanfiction is centered around Damian, the biological son of Batman and the current Robin (protegee of Batman). He has been thrown into the Young Justice (animated series) universe through an energy beam that was blasted at him. He then wakes up in an alleyway and is met by 'the Young Justice' team. As there is another 'Robin' in this universe, he is treated with suspicion and contempt by the team members and it is no wonder since he is very hostile and aggressive towards them. Suddenly the 'other Robin' gets kidnapped as well as the 'other Batman'. It's up to Damian to save the day.

The author of this fanfiction has really great structure and understanding of writing a good story. I was hooked by the first sentence. I loved how he/she portrays Damian's character. I'm usually very picky when people write about my favourite characters so I fully appreciate it when people write in character. The dialogue is really witty and funny. The bickering between the team members of Young Justice and Damian are believable and exactly what I would think the characters would say to each other.

Review #2
Control
Genre: Angst, Gen, Fluff
Series: Young Justice Animated

This author delves into the possibility of Wally West (Kid Flash) having domestic violence and psychologically damaging at home. This would explain why Wally keeps momentos and wants to be in control. 'Control' picks apart Wally's life as a 'normal' human being. On the outside, his team mates believe he lives in a normal house with normal parents. But in reality, Wally's father treats him like an object and his mother is in denial and ignores Wally's dilemma. Ever since he gained his powers a few years ago, his arents never treated him as their true son.

Though this fic is still ongoing and ergo, not finished; It made me really feel for Wally and his situation. Even though this is not canon, I thought it was brilliant how the author created the scenarios with his father and mother. There is lots of tension with all his relationships: with his team members, his best friend and his mentors. Certain moments really pull at my heartstrings. The author has made each scene believable, like as though how a teenage boy with superpowers would react.

Review #3
Frantic
Genre: Pick-your-own-ending (angst, fluff or bro), Slash
Series: Young Justice Animated

This one is a bit fast-paced and raunchy. Though this was really brilliant, I thought the writer could have improved on making the sentences shorter - I felt some sentences were a bit long-winded.

The story had three endings which you could read. I think this was a really clever method of storytelling. The author repeated the first sentence, but completely wrote a new scenario for each ending. One was an angst ending, one was a fluff ending and one was ended on a bromance note.

Review #4
On my Honor, I will do my Best
Genre: Fluff, Comedy, Gen
Series: Young Justice Animated

Superboy learns that Superman was a 'boyscout' and sets about to become just like him. This story is mostly done in Superman's point of view.

The author is very clever to put in boyscout references throughout the fanfiction.

Some parts were a bit confusing though because the author kept the switching point of views. I felt the story dragged a bit too long though, as interesting as the concept was, I really couldn't keep up until the end and I kept skipping sentences.

Review #5
Trials and Tribulations (or, The Art of Babysitting)
Genre: Comedy, Fluff, Gen
Series: Young Justice Animated

This is possibly the cutest story I have ever read. It involves the Young Justice team turning into little kids and an ex- superhero team mate has to go and look after them. While he looks after the younger ones, the older 'Justice League' superheroes have to go out and defeat the villian responsible.

This story was really good. I like how descriptive the author was. The portrayal of the characters as though they were young children was really amusing and I really could see them as kids.

Review #6
Face Up and Sing
Genre: Angst, General
Series: Young Justice Animated

Though this fanfiction was an enjoyable read, I felt the author has put too much dialogue into the piece. The characterization of Batman, Superman and Superboy was done really well and in character, but I felt that her 'Ma Kent', Superman's mother was a bit off. Also halfway through, I began to feel slightly bored of the writing.

Review #7
Pretty Bird
Genre: Angst, Genderswap (male to female), General
Series: Young Justice Animated

I felt this story was an excellent read but sometimes I could not follow what was happening. The concept is great: Robin wants to become a girl and this story shows how he transforms himself into one. I think I could not follow it because it seemed like it was jumping to and from scenarios a bit too much and not a lot of describing.

This sentence spoken by Batman, - He lets out the barest hint of a sigh. "No. You're my... daughter. Whatever happens. We'll be fine. - hit home for me. I felt it was a good way to end the fanfiction.

Review #8
Please, Sir, May I Have Some Itty Bitty Stalker Timmy?
Genre: Fluff, Comedy, Crossover, Alternate Universe
Series: Young Justice Animated / Red Robin

Cute and hilarious. This little piece was way too short, this story really left me wanting to read more! This story is a cross-over with a comic character from Red Robin. I love how the author really knows his comic universe and not just the animated series. His Tim portrayal was really spot on. I really wanted to go into the story and just hug little Timmy.

Review #9
Five Times Wally Couldn't Drive and One Time He Could
Genre: Comedy, General
Series: Young Justice Animated

This story is in the 'five times + one time' format popular on livejournal's popular 'fanfiction anonymous memes'. This is where the author writes about a subject in 5 different times or incidents that the character fails in doing, and one time he/she succeeds. In this case, recounting 5 times in which Wally could not drive and one time he did.

This was a really short and fun read. It is really humourous and in character. I can totally see Wally learning how to drive and his reactions to his driving.

The only thing that bothered me was how the author had set up each 'chapter'. Using 'xxonexx' , 'xxtwoxx', 'xxthreexx', etc was not visually appealing. When I read a story, I like the paragraphs and dialogues to be well spaced out and clear to read.

Review #10
The Kissing Factor
Genre: Fluff, Slash, Het
Series: Young Justice Animated

This is another '5 times they did, and one time' they didn't kind of format. I liked how the author uses different pairings to use for kisses. She uses different types of kisses and describes them really well. Though I am a bit iffy about 'girl and girl' pairings, I thought that kiss was the best written.