Wednesday, March 16, 2011

Kary' fanfiction (Final)








Title:In love with you

Hello, every one. Welcome to my blog, This is my fan fiction. my English is not really good, but hope you can understand it.


Both of them are satting on a very fancy car. Xu Hai stared at BaoZhu.

“Why you keep looking at me?” said Bao zhu

“You are looking at me as well,” Xuehai looked at Baozhu nasty, and holed her firmly in his arms.

“Bao Zhu, can I ask you a question?” watched at Baozhu, Xuehai softly asked. “..I…um...Can I call you wife?”

“……”Baozhu suddenly forgot to breath. And flushed cheeks, her answer has been revealed. “Wife … wife….wife...”Xuehai look at Baozhu, said that word softly.

“Wife, do you know? When I every time say that word, I think I am the most happiest man in this world. This is the first time I have happy since the days we were in Hangzhou(the place name of China). Baozhu, at this moment are you happy ? And now are you feel happy?” Xuehai said slowly , Baozhu already had reddish eyes, he gently stroked her cheek and wipe the tears in Baozhu’s eyes.

“Da Lang(other name for Xuehai)…” a long time after, “As long as you, I’ll be happy,” Baozhu choked said.

“My wife…” Xuehai headed down and kissed him. "Baozhu will be my first and last lover in my life" Xuehai thought.

“Master, we are back home now.” At this time, the driver had break the romantic moment, Xuehai looked up and kept stared at the driver. Baozhu looked at Xuehai and laughed.

“Come on, get off.” Baozhu said with smiled.

“Baozhu, a few days ago, I asked my workers to move over your luggages to our new house. Do not worry…none of them will be missinf!” “oh, thank you.” Baozhu said with smiled.

“haha.... to be a best man in the world, I have to know how to protect my woman, and also need to know how to get everything ready for her.” Xuehai said smiled.

Baozhu Looked at Xuehai, she felt he is a bit silly but also he is the only one who is love her the most. she found out Xuehai had changed a lot compared with before.

“Ugly mushroom head (any other name for Xuehai as well)!” said Baozhu
“Yes!” Xuehai stood up

“Now, help me pick up my panther toy from the front.”

“Yes!” that was a sweet command.

When they back to home, Xuehai and Baozhu changed back to their usual clothing, Sun was setting, after dinner, Xuehai and Baozhu returned to their room.

“Wife…” said Xuehai.

“What,,,,?” said Baozhu.

“wife…” said Xuehai.

“What….?” said Xuehai.

“How many times you want to call me?” Baozhu turned her head in front of Xuehai. But each time she looked at him, she felt full of happiness.

“Wife…” said Xuehai with smiled. “I will call many times in my life, until the world is end. So I can not answer your question,haha.” Said Xuehai.

"Oh, you bad,” said Baozhu

“Wife, this is not fair, I call you wife, you have to call me husband as well.”said Xuehai. “I need to hear you call me husband !” Xuehai’s heart always been shouting this words out.

“Ugly mushroom head, do not push too much!”said Baozhu. Xuehai suddenly stiff. “Wife, how come you still so fierce.” Xuehai complained to Baozhu.

“Well, I just said it once, listen carefully.” Baozhu said with shy voice and bit tense.

“Husband~!” Xuehai felt very surprised and looked gentel at Baozhu.

Xuehai woke up by the sunlight, watched the sleeping Bahozhu and kissed her lips softly. Baozhu slowly open her eyes until she saw Xuehai.

“Da lang…” Baozhu looking at Xuehai’s face, “I’m afraid of the dream I had last night. I’m afraid that…you’re like four years before, When I woke up, I can not found you, and you are disappeared.” Baozhu tightly held Xuehai.


"She was afraid ... Yes, she was afraid all this happen is a dream; she was afraid God would took away her happiness; she was afraid ... she is unfit to be happy.


“Fool,” Xuehai held Baozhu. “Baozhu, can you hear it? That was my heart beating, you will not lose a beat heart, because we need each other to survived.

“I,” said Baozhu.

“Wife, do not say any things,” said Xuehai.

“Dalang…no, Xuehai, you become more mature.” He seems to make her more dependent on him.


“I become to love you more, more and more.” Xuehai said sweet sound. “Baozhu, before I do not know anything, don’t know how to give you happiness, now I will always be love you in addition. And I will also give you a lot of happyness,” said Xuehai.

“Ok, we have to wake up,” Baozhu against Xuehai smiled. “ I don't want to leave a bad impression to your sister.”


Baozhu looked Xuehai and Xuehai’s family members, from now on, they are her family. She could felt what is love and what is family from them. Xuehai…let her have a new happy and lovely new life.

3 comments:

  1. Though I do not know the series, I enjoyed reading this story :D

    You've spaced out your dialogue which is a good practice. It is now easier for me to read the speech.

    You say your English is not very good but I reckon you're getting there and getting your storyline across. Good job!

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  2. Hi!
    I agree with Chloe, you're doing a good job even though you say your english is not that good. You still have a few days left, so I recommend that you use those days to look over as many grammar errors as possible, and just polish it (writing it in a Word document first and do a spell-check there will help you a lot)
    It would also be nice if you write a short background story or an introduction before your fanfiction starts, so we understand better what it's about.

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  3. I think your english is very good.The fanfic is written cleary and ther are not to many grammer mistakes

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